Really good potential but...
There's that stupid beat that starts at 0:26. Now it only becomes a problem at the end of 0:41 when it starts to get irregular. Then it feels like a woodpecker is trying to get in through my headphones.
Honestly if you made with without that beat (or stopped the beat in question at 0:42, or make it not so damn annoying) I would give this a 9/10. I would really like to see you take another whack at this song. I imagine removing it would be the easiest for you if you have other projects you're working on... Hope to see more!
PS: i'd donate but i'm a student and thus so poor I have negative money.